FINAL ROUGH CUT 8

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(JC)What I have changed since the last rough cut:

1. Stabilisation of shots

2. Cross cutting between stair shot at the end

3. Zoom out transitions on drops

4. Added takes to make shots more dynamic and help verisimilitude

5. Removed blurry footage of digger 

6. Moved beginning of some shots to the end of a lyric 

7. Slomo added on most narrative 

8. Added more performance to break up narrative 

9. Color corrected graveyard scene to be black and white 

10. Moved small sections of layering or removed it 

11. Made section where the lead singer joins girl at grave longer to make a larger impact on audience 

(CS)Corrections to be made:
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• Few tweaks to editing
• A few shots off pace
• Lip syncing and syncing up

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ROUGH CUT 7

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• minor tweaks 
• more syncing up of clips 

ROUGH CUT 6

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Things to improve:

• Abandoned building shots a bit too shaky
• Lip syncing off in various different places (takes away from verisimilitude) 
• Have the final shot last for 2 more seconds to anchor who it is properly and let people gasp
• Maybe add in dietetic footsteps and wind noise + birds? (diegetic outro)

ROUGH CUT 5

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What we have improved:

• Even more syncing up
• removing the little drumming sequence as it didn't work
• added and removed a few shots

ROUGH CUT 4

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What has been improved:

• Included fight scene in both slo motion and real time
• updated the funeral scene
• have another performance location with just lead singer being solo 
• tweaked a few bits to make it sync up 

ROUGH CUT 3

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• Transferred the files from Premiere to Final cut
• Added more performance footage, small tweaks and fixes

ROUGH CUT 2: Small Updates

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Changes made from last rough cut:

• added kitchen scene
• new going to bedroom scene
• taken out a few shots (titled in vid)
• trimed a few shots (e.g 0:32) 

PODCAST 9: Rough Cut Updates

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• We have a full performance cut
• Full rough cut is based on this with a few changes
• Still need to make more changes 
• Competition
• audience responses still need to be filmed

Rough Cut things to improve:

1.  Some slo-mo!
2.  Would've been better to have girl's hair tied back to show emoting
3.  Lot of shakey shots; lot of out of focus - target oof especially with layering
4.  Is there scope for BRIEF diegetic intro and/or intro?
5.  Lot of takes need brief trimming to reduce elements that diminish verisimilitude
6.  Every 'drop' needs careful consideration
7.  Fair bit of vocals not quite synced
8.  SS' perf + costume is a strength
9.  Play around with possible colouring/FX to make narrative distinctive too.
10.  Good eg of where you might layer: 017 has lot of open space, so maybe some of that graveyard scene
11.  023 good eg of framing that works well for non-greenscreened layer
12.  032 good eg of take needing slight trimming (from end)
13.  the 3 'coverage' takes around 042, last works well, prev 2 are random, and don't (think about  hand scraping over wall mural / grafittied wall etc
14.  stairs/bedroom - see my comments on prev cut; same issues
15.  this includes ONE jump cut; usually makes more sense to have 2/3 in one sequence
16.  058 an eg of not really paying full attention to the drop
17.  always be clear why you're using a take; 114 is just too random
18.  118 a big audio spike (duplicating audio layer?)
19.  122 watch out for takes that are too short; this also needs shot variety, eg CU of the eating
20.  125 look for opportunities to illustrate (Goodwin) lyrics, eg intoxicate me

• Re-shoots:
• Performance
• Burnt down building 
• Solo performance 
• Need more variety, especially at the end were car park is too much 
• Some lyrics bit out of sync, need to be reshot 
• Narrative
• Add in lead singer at the end
• changes of costume
• change argument scene with more close ups and slow mo slaps
• change whole funeral scene adding in lead singer

ROUGH CUT 1: Full Vid

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Above is the first full rough cut with the narrative and performance combined.

There are no visual effects as of yet but these will be improved.

Edited by CS

What needs to be changed:

• Colour correction on a few clips
• 1:00 - 1:09 the background two performers arent playing 
• shot at 1:21 is too quick
• 1:50 odd framing with a tree in top left
• 1:51 CU of push
• Clip at 2:02 needs to be replaced
• Stabilization in a few shaky clips
• Maybe add some greenscreen effect at 3:20
• Have some greenscreen footage added in narrative in some places
• Reshoot graveyard scene
• Avoid shooting the text on them

PERFORMANCE CUT 1 - No VFX + Rough

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(JC)
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What needs to be changed:

• Colour correction on all garage scenes to adjust for lighting and camera issues
• Masking and finishing scene from 0100 to 0114
• Cleaning up takes that are slightly off beat
• Stabilisation of shaky clips
• Utilise more of footage from outdoor shoot later in video

Dark scenes black and white:
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Whole video black and white:
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AUDIENCE FEEDBACK: Narrative Rushes + Performance Rough Cut

Narrative rushes:
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Feedback:

• realistic
• Worked for the audience
• some shots were blurry
• didnt really make sense with graveyard
• liked the table scene although lighting was bad
• good continuity
• shot of TV was shaky 
• lighting was different for different shots
• last take at the end was too long and shaky 
• story makes little sense

Performance rough cut:
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Feedback:

• sometimes takes were too long 
• costume was realistic
• facepaint was weird
• different shots had different lighting 
• more enthusiasm for bassist
• ELS was cool when they switched postition
• costumes were good
• singer's singing was convincing
• liked the overlaying of the singer on top of the drumming
• some shots of the guitar solo was a bit off
• some syncing of singing shots were off