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Above is the first full rough cut with the narrative and performance combined.
There are no visual effects as of yet but these will be improved.
Edited by CS
What needs to be changed:
- Colour correction on a few clips
- 1:00 - 1:09 the background two performers arent playing
- shot at 1:21 is too quick
- 1:50 odd framing with a tree in top left
- 1:51 CU of push
- Clip at 2:02 needs to be replaced
- Stabilization in a few shaky clips
- Maybe add some greenscreen effect at 3:20
- Have some greenscreen footage added in narrative in some places
- Reshoot graveyard scene
- Avoid shooting the text on them
SUMMARY OF WHAT WE DISCUSSED TODAY:
ReplyDelete1: Some slo-mo!
2: Would've been better to have girl's hair tied back to show emoting
3: Lot of shakey shots; lot of out of focus - target oof especially with layering
4: Is there scope for BRIEF diegetic intro and/or intro?
5: Lot of takes need brief trimming to reduce elements that diminish verisimilitude
6: Every 'drop' needs careful consideration
7: Fair bit of vocals not quite synced
8: SS' perf + costume is a strength
9: Play around with possible colouring/FX to make narrative distinctive too.
10: Good eg of where you might layer: 017 has lot of open space, so maybe some of that graveyard scene
11: 023 good eg of framing that works well for non-greenscreened layer
12: 032 good eg of take needing slight trimming (from end)
13: the 3 'coverage' takes around 042, last works well, prev 2 are random, and don't (think about hand scraping over wall mural / grafittied wall etc
14: stairs/bedroom - see my comments on prev cut; same issues
15: this includes ONE jump cut; usually makes more sense to have 2/3 in one sequence
16: 058 an eg of not really paying full attention to the drop
17: always be clear why you're using a take; 114 is just too random
18; 118 a big audio spike (duplicating audio layer?)
19: 122 watch out for takes that are too short; this also needs shot variety, eg CU of the eating
20: 125 look for opportunities to illustrate (Goodwin) lyrics, eg intoxicate me